Sean Pendr

As I am not finished writing my re-debut yet i will keep this short. you use the phrase "he asked" too prolifically. try to find an alternative. i would suggest ...

Do i smell a werewolf obsession there? nice imagry in your prolague, just make it longer ok? and less obvious forshadowing. make it like. "Then as if for a moment ...

WOW! Getting a lot of attention are we? lol I just so happen to LOVE IT!!! so true is this all! anyway just stopping by to say PAWS OFF of ...

I am effectivly surprised. SURPRISE! it seems that like myself you have a knack for detail in such a form that is relaxing and not as such of what is ...

dammit!!! stop writing so much! ^.^ i can keep up....... lol im gonna try to review the others i just printed them out for a sit down. *drinks coffee* anway ...

i agree wiht kylan you need more meat on them bones....lol.... but the power of your descriptions flow well, i hope you write more and longer on this topic because ...

very well written but you kind of jump a little too far into the plot too sudenly. find a more flowing trasitions or star4t it from the get go. like ...

god...your a peom powerhouse.... the forced ryming is evident in the 2nd and 4th lines of each stanza, it flows nice, and you word use fluctuates throughout. imagry comes from ...

i do have to say that its a good start but you need to space it out between each new person speaking. also i would reccomend the replacement of what ...

i agree it is very well written. detailed enough though has flow, a nicely developed plot and a good set of strong characters. but of course the thing i like ...

...that um...well was...potent... I myself am a child of devorced parents, and have dealt with their court case for 6 and a half years now... so this, which as suggested ...

this is very well done i like it alot i cannot wait to see what happens next, i would only have to say create a little more anger in the ...

Hiya Lindsay! i think this is yur best work it needs just one quick edit then its perfect for the people who feel the same, that what poets do, make ...

[he girl looked up into his eyes, her smile beaming out of the sadness on her face. “I love you more,” she said. “Probably,” he said straight. The girl’s eyebrows ...

Quote: [A cool breeze blew through the half-open window causing the brittle branches of the willow growing outside to tap rythmically and the delicate golden curtains to leap away. The ...